"G_Body_Man: Sponsored by the number 3" (gbodyman)
10/07/2015 at 15:09 • Filed to: misadventures in automotive journalism
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"G_Body_Man: Sponsored by the number 3" (gbodyman)
10/07/2015 at 15:09 • Filed to: misadventures in automotive journalism | 0
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My second blog post !!!error: Indecipherable SUB-paragraph formatting!!! ! Take a read through, and voice your opinion. Dome Zero for your time.
Van Man, rocks the Man Van
> G_Body_Man: Sponsored by the number 3
10/07/2015 at 15:18 |
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Not a great writer, but I can give some feedback:
- use more complex sentences (too many simple sentences make your writing seem choppy)
- more jokes
- you didn’t so much defend the Prius as you did explain it; add a little more to defend the car
Otherwise, I'd say you're off to a good start.
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G_Body_Man: Sponsored by the number 3
> Van Man, rocks the Man Van
10/07/2015 at 15:20 |
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Thanks for the feedback! I’ll try and integrate it into my next article.