Grade My Artwork: Part Two

"Jay Lauer" (thefaultinourcars)
11/23/2014 at 23:16 • Filed to: None

Pictured first is my tentative business card. Yes, it's vertical. That's what I'm doing. Considering I started with a hat, I'm pretty proud, but feel free to rip it apart.

I tried inverting the color, but that didn't work too well.

Have at it.

DISCUSSION (18)

Thunderface > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:18

me gusta

TheHondaBro > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:19

Looks good!

Jay Lauer > TheHondaBro
11/23/2014 at 23:22

Thanks!

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:22

Tomorrow I might try cleaning up that Mustang graphic a bit. My only other suggestion is to space out the lines with the contact info and address a bit. They're kinda squished together.

FocusedMark > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:34

I don't see a single flaw. Well done!!

Jay Lauer > Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To
11/23/2014 at 23:45

Yeah, the numbers from the email are a bit close to the others, but I can tweak that easily. Stylistically, I wanted it really tightly ordered.

As for the picture, there's quite a few dots on it from once being a piece of fabric. I tried zapping a lot of them, but it takes someone more patient than me. If anything, I thought it made it look older and less clip-art-like. If you're willing to work with it, that's definitely appreciated.

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:47

Might also help to change the font... using something other than a default font (is that Arial?) goes a LONG ways.

 V8 Rustler > Jay Lauer
11/23/2014 at 23:58

10/10 would do business.

Jay Lauer > Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To
11/23/2014 at 23:59

I heard that from another person too.

I used GothamBold. I was just trying to match the hat really, giving it a retro/nostalgic old-timey feel. The hats are from the early 90s, so I thought they were almost ironically cool again, but I'm certainly biased.

Jayhawk Jake > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 00:00

I don't like the font on the logo much. Something script might actually look really good, it'd go well with the mustang

EDIT: I also meant to add overall it looks great! I like the vertical business card. If you could add another color it might help. I wonder if black might look better than blue on everything but the logo. Just some thoughts

Jay Lauer > Jayhawk Jake
11/24/2014 at 00:09

I think the black might clash with the blue since the blue is already so dark.

Now that I've heard it a couple times, the font is starting to bug me. It needs to be brought up to date a bit. I'll probably ditch the arch pattern and go with a thin font.

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 00:11

I meant the font for contact info and stuff. Open Sans and Droid Sans (both from Google Fonts) are two of my go-to sans fonts.

Jay Lauer > Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To
11/24/2014 at 00:44

Ah, I used Tahoma for the contact info. I looked at a bunch of business cards from my wallet, and even the ad agency people used basic fonts for the contact info. I didn't want to go too overboard with it.

However, I've been dicking around with the main font now that it's bugging me. I looked at Singer's page and about shat myself: http://singervehicledesign.com/ They're so on point that it hurts.

So I tried out a thin font design.

Kinja'd!!!

I'm not sold on the 'Lauer Service' part yet, but I'm really digging the spaced out 'Restoration & Repair'

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 00:50

Yeah, the second one looks really nice. I think the curve fit on the first is a bit fucky.

Singer's site is quite nice, though. A few of their slideshow pics are compressed to hell, but it's a nice design. Not something that couldn't be replicated with codrops templates and tutorials, though.

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 01:03

Here's a shitty five-minute attempt at smoothing out that mustang. Some bits are missing and I'll have to fill them in later.

Kinja'd!!!

super high res because why not

EDIT: imgur link because kinja:

Kinja'd!!!

Jay Lauer > Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To
11/24/2014 at 01:16

Yeah, my fear now on the 2nd one is that it looks too much like an iPhone. iOS8 font is pretty close. So now I'm at this. I still have to keep the target audience in mind, so I can't go too hip with the design.

Kinja'd!!!

I'll be tweaking this damn thing forever until I'm satisfied. I'm torn between the two. Shit.

Jake - Has Bad Luck So You Don't Have To > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 01:20

That looks better, though the kerning on the location and phone number is still a bit hard-and-fast

D > Jay Lauer
11/24/2014 at 02:54

Pretty nice. The centered image and right-aligned text bug me though.